Music VIdeo Pitch Feedback

The comments I got from music video was pretty constructive, which I found quite useful. Although I do quite like the idea I had pitched to the class they thought I should go in a different direction.
Here are a few commonets I received:

"The storyline is practical with a few problems that can be easily overcomed"
I agree with this comment I tried to make a storyline that I knew would be possible to shoot without having many problems anpart from the weather.
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"Need more loactions"
I agree with this as well in my pitch I had only showed two locations because I hadn't thought of any others yet.

"How is it different to other videos"
It wasn't going to be much different to other videos because I was trying to conform to dubstep videos that tell a story.

"The editing needs to be fast paced to match the song"
When I start my editing I will deffinatly cut the shots together to make it more fast paced.

"Does the storyline match the song?"
Quite a few people in the class said the same thing in their feedback, I personally thought it did match the storyline because there are very few words in the song which are:
Innocence...you'll never be mine.
I got my storyline form this because the main character is trying to get a girl that he'll never get because when he does he gets beaten up.

"You could be more adventurous with the story"
Yes I was thinking the same thing, but I was thinking more practically when I came up with this idea. So shooting the shots for my storyline I knew were certainly possible. I didn't want to make an amazing storyline that I wouldn't be able to shoot.

Music Video Concept IDea

Follow the link to a prezi I made about my music video:

http://prezi.com/vghn2nojuyub/music-video-pitch/

Thanks

MoodBoard

This is a mood board for my music video. It is supposed to create a theme for music video allowing people to get feel for what my video will be about. It has different aspects of the video I will try to include, for example it has the man on his bike having a good time. This is because I want my video to be montage of a couple of my mates and I having a good time on bikes attempting to do tricks. The tools and tool kit are a representation of us fixing our bikes when they have a problem. The image of people in the park is because that is were my mates and I would usualy go riding.

My Audience

The genre of music I might choose for music video would be Drum & Bass for example:
Plan B - Love goes down (Doctor P remix)

My Audience Cage:

Class       - Lower & Middle Class
Age         - Between 16 to 24
Gender    - Both Male and Female
Ethnicity  - Mostly White with people from others as well.

• My audience are most likely to be party goers and often like to go out and have a good time.
• There method of transport would mostly be public transport or bicycles.

• They live with there parents or are at university.
• Prefered music: Drum & Bass, Dubstep and Jungle.
• On the tv they may watch programmes like skins or misfits.
• Most of the audience might live in london, but also aound the UK and America.
• Holiday locations they would go to innovation(drum & bass week in spain) or Maguluf.
• They like to eat chinease and most fast food.